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Post by vilmarys on Sept 16, 2009 16:37:36 GMT -5
Good job! I especially love the last stanza, it really expresses the metaphorical language of your emotions. And er I don't know about anyone else here, but aren't you not allowed to put down other people for what they post? I'm just saying...... Anyways, good job and you should write poetry more often ;D Yes you are correct! No one is allowed to put anyone down for what they post. I dont tolerate that!!!! And job well done on that poem musiclove! I like it a lot. It has a lot of emotion.
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Post by musicislove on Sept 16, 2009 17:41:42 GMT -5
Thanks very much I really do appreciate it. ;D
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Post by vilmarys on Sept 16, 2009 17:48:28 GMT -5
Thanks very much I really do appreciate it. ;D Anytime!!!! ;D
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Post by kittyhalo17 on Sept 17, 2009 16:19:17 GMT -5
DEATH XXXXXXXXXXXX
My name is death. I'm here to stay. I help you out with razer blades. Pills in one hand Blade in another Incase one dose not work You have the other.
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Post by musicislove on Sept 18, 2009 8:47:22 GMT -5
DEATH XXXXXXXXXXXX My name is death. I'm here to stay. I help you out with razer blades. Pills in one hand Blade in another Incase one dose not work You have the other. Wow, that's depressing. But it's really good! i love it I wish I could write something like that! Nice Work!!
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Post by ilovestark on Sept 19, 2009 12:42:30 GMT -5
Good job! I especially love the last stanza, it really expresses the metaphorical language of your emotions. And er I don't know about anyone else here, but aren't you not allowed to put down other people for what they post? I'm just saying...... Anyways, good job and you should write poetry more often ;D Thanks so much That is a huge relief And yeah, im pretty sure there is a rule on that. Your really good too, and im glad to see all of the different poems you write. You should make a book or something im pretty sure im not the only one who would buy it! hahahahahaha that's funny. I've been told by my boyfriend that I should make a book too, but I doubt I ever will. Anyways, here's another one coming for you. But if I do, you guys on this site will be the FIRST to know... ;D Inner Battles You feel it, It's no stranger. The blow hits you, And you feel like falling. You hear it, It's not muffled at all. The sharpness destroys you, And you feel like crying. You see it, It's not in disguise. The clarity claws you, And you feel like dying. You hold it, It's not comforting you. The sadness rips you, And you feel like running. You bear it, It's only crippling. The weight crushes you, And you feel like spinning. You attack it, It's only fighting back. The destruction kills you, And you feel like surrendering. You kill it, It's no longer alive. The triumph lifts you, And you feel like soaring. So ya there it is.... ;D
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Post by kittyhalo17 on Sept 19, 2009 17:04:26 GMT -5
DEATH XXXXXXXXXXXX My name is death. I'm here to stay. I help you out with razer blades. Pills in one hand Blade in another Incase one dose not work You have the other. Wow, that's depressing. But it's really good! i love it I wish I could write something like that! Nice Work!! thx and you can! anyone can! i Know its sad.it was the frist poem i have ever written. mine are much happyer now<3
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Post by vilmarys on Sept 21, 2009 16:54:14 GMT -5
Thanks so much That is a huge relief And yeah, im pretty sure there is a rule on that. Your really good too, and im glad to see all of the different poems you write. You should make a book or something im pretty sure im not the only one who would buy it! hahahahahaha that's funny. I've been told by my boyfriend that I should make a book too, but I doubt I ever will. Anyways, here's another one coming for you. But if I do, you guys on this site will be the FIRST to know... ;D Inner Battles You feel it, It's no stranger. The blow hits you, And you feel like falling. You hear it, It's not muffled at all. The sharpness destroys you, And you feel like crying. You see it, It's not in disguise. The clarity claws you, And you feel like dying. You hold it, It's not comforting you. The sadness rips you, And you feel like running. You bear it, It's only crippling. The weight crushes you, And you feel like spinning. You attack it, It's only fighting back. The destruction kills you, And you feel like surrendering. You kill it, It's no longer alive. The triumph lifts you, And you feel like soaring. So ya there it is.... ;D I like that! I know I have def felt that way before!!
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Post by ilovestark on Sept 21, 2009 19:13:18 GMT -5
I think we all have one time or another
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Post by My soul for a cookie on Sept 22, 2009 18:11:16 GMT -5
Faker Cry into my shoulder Hold me till you stop shaking Tell me what is so wrong That you can’t say I love you without faking
I hate you You think I’ve betrayed you But you don’t know What it’s like To be all alone
You scream and cry You think I’m mean You think it hurts Take a look at me
I wish you’d die Just kill yourself Pull the stupid trigger
Once you’re gone I won’t cry anymore Or live in illogical fear
I know that last one was mean but this is directed to someone who wasn't very nice.... A T A L L
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Post by ilovestark on Sept 23, 2009 22:00:58 GMT -5
FakerCry into my shoulder Hold me till you stop shaking Tell me what is so wrong That you can’t say I love you without faking I hate youYou think I’ve betrayed you But you don’t know What it’s like To be all alone You scream and cry You think I’m mean You think it hurts Take a look at me I wish you’d die Just kill yourself Pull the stupid trigger Once you’re gone I won’t cry anymore Or live in illogical fear I know that last one was mean but this is directed to someone who wasn't very nice.... A T A L L Is this someone on this site?
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Post by Ivy on Sept 23, 2009 22:38:45 GMT -5
Is this someone on this site? I don't think it's anyone on this site.
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Post by logically on Sept 23, 2009 22:46:39 GMT -5
Hahaha, I sure hope not. xD;;;;
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Post by Ivy on Sept 23, 2009 23:23:17 GMT -5
Hahaha, I sure hope not. xD;;;; LOL! ;D
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Post by My soul for a cookie on Sept 24, 2009 6:12:18 GMT -5
no, not someone on this site =P Everyone here is really nice =D
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