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Post by My soul for a cookie on Oct 5, 2009 14:06:31 GMT -5
thanks for the info cookie ;D NP ;D
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Post by musicislove on Oct 5, 2009 15:30:31 GMT -5
Okay, So I was reading my mom some poems, and she was all like "why are your poems always so depressing?" So I replied, "Well, I have no clue...." Im usually a pretty happy person, so come to think of it, I have never really written a non-depressing poem, so, I made one that idk isn't really depressing...
His Eyes
His eyes are like fireflies Dancing in the night
His arms are a harbor MY safe harbor Our ship to sail
His smile can light up the dark in the evening clouds I see his lips singing me to sleep
I see him in everything I do Everything I see and everywhere I am May I have him back?
Okay, so maybe the last stanza was a little depressing, oh well (; I tried. So what do ya think?
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Post by My soul for a cookie on Oct 5, 2009 17:04:42 GMT -5
Okay, So I was reading my mom some poems, and she was all like "why are your poems always so depressing?" So I replied, "Well, I have no clue...." Im usually a pretty happy person, so come to think of it, I have never really written a non-depressing poem, so, I made one that idk isn't really depressing... His Eyes His eyes are like fireflies Dancing in the night His arms are a harbor MY safe harbor Our ship to sail His smile can light up the dark in the evening clouds I see his lips singing me to sleep I see him in everything I do Everything I see and everywhere I am May I have him back? Okay, so maybe the last stanza was a little depressing, oh well (; I tried. So what do ya think? I like it alot >.< you're right, the last stanza has a hint of depressing stuff in it but it also begs a story. Curiousity drives one to want to know, who took him? Why did he leave? What kind of male is he? I mean, father? Boyfriend? Older brother? (sorry, I try to see a story in everything and I'm afraid my curiousity is rather rude >.<).
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luvie
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Post by luvie on Oct 6, 2009 14:06:45 GMT -5
Good job everyone
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Post by ilovestark on Oct 6, 2009 15:57:40 GMT -5
-claps loudly- i second that... we have some amazing talent here ;D
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Post by musicislove on Oct 6, 2009 17:16:16 GMT -5
Okay, So I was reading my mom some poems, and she was all like "why are your poems always so depressing?" So I replied, "Well, I have no clue...." Im usually a pretty happy person, so come to think of it, I have never really written a non-depressing poem, so, I made one that idk isn't really depressing... His Eyes His eyes are like fireflies Dancing in the night His arms are a harbor MY safe harbor Our ship to sail His smile can light up the dark in the evening clouds I see his lips singing me to sleep I see him in everything I do Everything I see and everywhere I am May I have him back? Okay, so maybe the last stanza was a little depressing, oh well (; I tried. So what do ya think? I like it alot >.< you're right, the last stanza has a hint of depressing stuff in it but it also begs a story. Curiousity drives one to want to know, who took him? Why did he leave? What kind of male is he? I mean, father? Boyfriend? Older brother? (sorry, I try to see a story in everything and I'm afraid my curiousity is rather rude >.<). No rudeness here! Thanks (: That means I have done well (: I think it is great to try to find a story in everything, it keeps the world exciting. And, thank you all, for your compliments, it is truly wonderful to have you guys here to understand my poems and stuff. If I showed my friends they'd be like "cool, now lets go play X- box..lol" And, I'd like to agree with the past two posts, we do have some amazing talent here ;D
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Post by My soul for a cookie on Oct 6, 2009 19:06:53 GMT -5
I like it alot >.< you're right, the last stanza has a hint of depressing stuff in it but it also begs a story. Curiousity drives one to want to know, who took him? Why did he leave? What kind of male is he? I mean, father? Boyfriend? Older brother? (sorry, I try to see a story in everything and I'm afraid my curiousity is rather rude >.<). No rudeness here! Thanks (: That means I have done well (: I think it is great to try to find a story in everything, it keeps the world exciting. And, thank you all, for your compliments, it is truly wonderful to have you guys here to understand my poems and stuff. If I showed my friends they'd be like "cool, now lets go play X- box..lol" And, I'd like to agree with the past two posts, we do have some amazing talent here ;D Yeah, there is alot of amazin' talent ^.^ and awh! I like video games too but...but....literature >.< sorry.
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Post by ilovestark on Oct 11, 2009 20:45:36 GMT -5
i agree with cookie.... video games are no match for reading and poems and such.....
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Post by kittyhalo17 on Oct 14, 2009 12:01:10 GMT -5
Okay, So I was reading my mom some poems, and she was all like "why are your poems always so depressing?" So I replied, "Well, I have no clue...." Im usually a pretty happy person, so come to think of it, I have never really written a non-depressing poem, so, I made one that idk isn't really depressing... His Eyes His eyes are like fireflies Dancing in the night His arms are a harbor MY safe harbor Our ship to sail His smile can light up the dark in the evening clouds I see his lips singing me to sleep I see him in everything I do Everything I see and everywhere I am May I have him back? Okay, so maybe the last stanza was a little depressing, oh well (; I tried. So what do ya think? i think this is a great poem and can be taken as sad or happy really. but i love the way it was written! another thought!!!!!!!!! I agree we do have much talent here
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Post by blinky on Oct 22, 2009 14:05:55 GMT -5
I knew I had two more Twilight banners..(promise these are the last )
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Post by blinky on Oct 22, 2009 14:06:29 GMT -5
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Post by blinky on Oct 22, 2009 20:05:41 GMT -5
Happy Halloween My soul for a cookie
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Post by blinky on Oct 22, 2009 20:06:45 GMT -5
Happy Halloween musicislove
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Post by blinky on Oct 22, 2009 20:07:27 GMT -5
Happy Halloween ilovestark
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Post by musicislove on Oct 23, 2009 11:46:07 GMT -5
AWW! Blinky, thanks soo much! HAPPY HALLOWEEN! (:
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